Lead No. 1 Descriptive:
A cloud moves in the sky, changing the shadows over the uneven ground. A split second later, the sound of a shutter goes off, and Emily removes her camera from her face to look at the picture she just took. She nods silent approval of the photo, and moves to a new target a bit farther on.
Lead No. 2 Descriptive:
There are over a thousand photos posted on her facebook. Each one is different, each one tells you something. These thousand are the ones that survived.
Lead No. 3
“I just choose what ever i think will look cool, sometimes it doesn't, sometimes it does,” Says Emily Park about photography. Emily is a Photography major at Ithica Collage.
The second one really catches the reader. I would recommend using it.
ReplyDelete-Banquo
I like the second one. It is by far the most curiosfying. You also misspelled Ithaca in your third lead.
ReplyDeleteI find the second one to be the most effective. It is short and concise and only gives enough information to get the reader wanting more. Good Job.
ReplyDeleteI actually like the first one the best. I like the descriptive feel and how it makes you feel like you're there.
ReplyDelete~KG
The second one is the best. It's short enough to leave the reader wanting to know more about the story.
ReplyDelete-ACM
im undetermined on either to chose the first one or the second their both really good. the first one show a lot more descriptive and imagery, although the second one makes me wond how come those pictures survived and not the others that had once been tooken if have...
ReplyDeleteI like the first one better, it's more interesting then the other ones
ReplyDelete-MP